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// ﻿ // // Assignment 11 // // The BEGINING THE SCHOOL YEAR // // This is my first day at school and i am ready to work just to get it over with. I heard many things about wilkinsburg and the coments wasn't good. My mom didn't know what school to send me to so she send me here. When first came in to this school i was really scared because i thought that the highschoolers might bully me. What if you was a middle schooler you would know how it would feel am i right or am i right. Anyway i came here to learn and pay attention to myself and myself only and not nobody else. When i cam here i had a feeling that this school is going to have ghetto 7th graders come to school and not learn nothing just reck the school and make more dirty as it is. But the good thing is that im in the scholars and i and hoping that the scholars class would be so nice and great. I didn't kno anbody in the school except for the people who went to my school which was kelly school. I really miss kelly school,kelly school was my life and imma miss it really bad. I knew some turner and jaustin kids but not as much. Their wasn't that much kelly students in the middel school. to my opinion the most students that is in the middle school was jaustin but i really don't know to be honest. But the first day of school was fine for me nobody in the class didn't talk as much but to their friends that they know. So far i am going to enjoy this school year for now. // // DURING THE SCHOOL YEAR // // I was getting to know the whole class better. They was really funny and nice but the problem is that during the school year things got really different. We started to talk alot and yell at the teachers and get refearals and calls home. That isn't me because i came here to learn and get a good education. But the problem is they play to much anf they need to calm down altiitle bit and start learning a little more. To be honest we have our days of being good and not talking as much and doing our work. But sometimes they can take their jokes alittle to far that really pisses me off. Sometimes i really don't like them all like that because they start stuff with me but they are good people sometimes though. But besides them school is going great. The teachers are really good people. When somebody bringing you down you can go to the teacher that you know that is very close to talk to about how you feel. The favorite class that i really like is 6th period and 7th period. 6th period is the best class(sorry mr boll but its true but you are the best teacher though). Band is something to make me feel happy because i could play the drums and to make me feel happy.I also like the students in the class(to be honest they are much better than my other class not to be ignorant but its true). They are really funny and they feel like family to me. In the marching band the people there i feel really close to them and they are really awesome. They are the best people that i have fun with. The school year is almost over and to be honest, I'm goin' to miss being here because i have nothing to do for the summer. // // END OF THE SCHOOL YEAR // // The end is here even though it is 3 days left untill we leave. I'm going to miss being in band and being in english because those 2 is the best periods ever( and im not just saying that mr boll). To be honest im not going to miss some people in this class but, on the ohter hand imma miss some poeple in this class. Imma miss my teachers as well. The teachers was a good help to me this year and i really appreciate that so thank you teachers for being such teachers and being their for me even when sometimes you teachers piss me off but imma still miss all of you and wish all of you a best summer and don't forget about if you do imma kill you in your dreams. Wilkinsburg school isn't that bad, it's a good school but the children has to be more mature and be more neat and clean. This school is to old to be all nasty and dirty. Imma miss the books in the libarary. The thing that i won't miss is these ghetto kids pissing be off with ther ghettoness and their big ghetto mouths(don't tell anybody that i said that except for the teachers that i know of). I going to miss all of the rewarding field trip that we had. Thank you Wilkinsburg midde high school i might see you next year if i do all of you teachers better remember me. //

// 9) The passage that i am about to write about is a peson name Barack Obama the Prsident of the Untied States. I am writing about him because the inspires many peoeple in the world well mostly black americans( not to be racis mr boll) I am going to tell you some facts about Barak Obamas life and accomplishments. This passage is going to be very informative so you better listen up and pay attention. // // Barack Obama was born in August 4th 1961. Also he had a white mom and a black dad. HIs father was a educational person. His father went to Harvard University on a scholsrship. His father was a Luo form Nyanza Province Kenya. Also barack is named after his dad. Now i am going to tell you about baracks mother. His mothers name is Ann Obama. She was born in Wichita Kansas. Her family also traces to Germany and Ireland. Thar's is the only thing that i got from barack's mother and father. One bad thing that happen in barack's life is that he used to take drug. Mostly black people take drugs that is one thing that inspires people. // // Now I'm going to tell you about barack obamam and michelle obama. First is that barack obama met michelle obama met at michelle's job. They started to hang around for a while and they started to like each other alot more. Then they got married at Trinity United Church of Christ at chicago. It happen in Octobor 3,1992. A couple years later barack and michelle had two little girls. One of their names is Mailia obama born in 1998. the other girl name is Natasha obama born in 2001( it was around the two twin towers got attacked.) I also realized that now we have a first black family in the white house That is another reason that obama inspires people everywhere in the world. // // Now imma tell you what barack's acomplishments in this life that inspires people in the world. When he was young he graduated form Columbia University in New York City. When he got older he wanted to become the President of the United States so he tried it. When he was the last day to give a speech and the speech that he gave us was speech. The words that he said was we are one. When he said that word everybody was cheering for him. Barack obama is like living the leguacy of Martin Luther King Jr. That speech that he gave us that was the thing that made him Presindet of the United States. When he became President people started to cry because it was a mericale of a black man to become President. Black people was really happy but some White people wasn''t happy. I really don't care if the white poeple wasn't happy barack deserved to be president period point blank. Also the person who made 9/11 barack obama was the one to send a secret spy to track down him and kill him. Last week the person who made 9/11 died on sunday. Thanks to Barack obama. That was one of his big accomplishments of being a President,the person who made 9/11 was a wanted fugitive for over 5 years. He was the one who killed all those people bacause he didn't like the choices that America made. Barack obama made a speech the day before the mad died. He said that justice has been surved. That is another way that he inspires people. I thank barack obama for being a good president and that i hope he makes things better for this place. Those are the things why that barack inspires people. // // Good job here jada- I like that you focused on Obama's influence on Black Americans (i'm not offended). There are definitely some opinions here which should not be present in a purely informational piece. What could you add about what Obama has done in office that has influenced people? // // Good work, Keep it up. // // MY SUPER SUMMER EVER BY JADA PORTER A.K.A JAJA OR TWIX OR SNIX LOLZ // // 8) Today is the day. It is the day to live it up and go forward. This is my final day i this school i am goin to miss this school so much and all of my teachers and friends. What, you //// if it // // was the last day you would miss everybody and you know that it is time to move forward. Now it's my time to live it up. If you are reading this their is some good things and sad things. But you are going to love it no matter what i say. This is my story of my summer. I hope you like it and you better like it. // // Today is my graduation and i'm so excited to go to my first graduation from elementary school. When i was at home i looked at myself in the mirror and said this is it and i am so happy for this day to come. " Are you ready to go jada" my mom said so excited for me. Yeah mom and i was outside going to my grandpa's car and my mom, and grandpa said that i look beautiful and they was so proud of me of my accomplishment. When i went to my classroom the students said wow i looked so pretty. My hair was braided the front part was braided on the side and the back was braided straight back. My dress was nice it had flowers on it and the color was yellow,black,white,and alittle bit of silver in it. I was wearing whedges with it to be honest i felt taller but alittle to tall. I was given alot of compliments about what i was wearing. When me and my classmates was going to the gym where everybody was at for the graduation eveybody looked so nice well most people to be honest ,no disrespect. One person had some ugly lookeing poytails in their head and it didn't look nice they could of probably do better. Other people looked nice their dresses so so nice well not nice as mine but nice. Oh my gosh the music is coming on, that means the graduation has been started. // // All of the parents have cameras with them and mostly the whole gym was full of chairs and people that want tosee their children graduate. When i was walking to my seat i had my head down because i was really shy to see people look at me i think that if people that i don't know looking at me i think that they trying to say that their is something wrong with my outfit or how i look. But i know that i look nice well everybody looked nice except for one and i felt sorry for that person. Everybody was at their seats and the music stopped when the principal was talking i was just lookig around if i could see my mom and big brother and their they was smiling at me well my mom was my brother was just looking at me givng me thumbs up. Why do brithers got to be so lame? Anyway when the teachers was anouncing the student to go get their certificate my heart was pounding like i was about to pass out because i was hoping that i would get called up. I got called up for alot of certificate like about 7 or 6 times and i was tired of gettig up and sitting back down i would rather stand up but i had whedges on. Everytime i go back to my seat imy mom was taking pictures of me like i was some type of model. When the graduation was over everybody was in the hall all crowded i couldn't even find my friends to tell them goodbye that's how crowded it was. // // Sence me and my evil cousin othello graduated our parents ask us to decide where we want to go eat at. So we decided to go to a chinese restraunt. Chinese food is one of my favorite food to eat. When we went their it was my first time eating sushi!!! It was soooooo good my othello took a picture of it. We had a good time on my graduation because it was the time to spend time with family. I am just getting started with my summer story their is more to say and hear from me. // // A couples days after my graduation my mom made me go to summer school so that i can be prepared for middle school. I didn't want to go because it is summer school i didn't want to see kids that i know or don't know my summer is for family and me not to go to some summer school and see kids and teachers it feels like school again even though it is school but you know what i mean. Summer school was okay i guess. The bad part of summer school is when that you have to eat these cold sandwitches that looks like crap. The good thing is that you get treats from your summer school teacher. // // When i was at home my mom was trying to make plans for her birthday in july. If your reading this and you want to know my moms birthday you are never going to know the date but you will know the month hahhahahahaha. Anyway My mom wanted to go midnight bowling and gokart riding with family well othello's family. So i said that sounds fun and exciting. So the decision has been made my mom said. She called othelo's house and told his mom that we was going midnight bowling and gokart riding. Now the plan is set and ready to go. I was happy like a monkey wanting a banana well sorta. // // The day before my mom's birthday i went over to the hospital to see my grandma. She had dietbeties and she's not doing well. Well she is and she isn't. Me and my grandma had kind not been getting along very well but i still loved her very much and i know that she loves me too. I was really happy to see her i didn't see her for a while since my graduation. She was dozing of and talking to me and my mom at the same time. The hospital smells like old people and it is nt a pleasent smell that you are going to like honestly. At least can the doctors wash the people that is in their and put some air refreshener in the building. Everytime me and y mom was over there to see my grandma my mom would be the first one to clean my grandmother because she is a clean freak and she wants her mother to be clean not dirty like other people. To be honest i really dont blame my mom for doing that because i would do the same thing if thst was my mom. The next day it was my mom's birthday and that was the some day when summer school was over. That day was a happy day for me because it is my mom's birthday and that their is nomore summer school YEAH!!!!!!! When my mom and me went to othello's house everybosy said happy birthday and they made a huge card with comments on them and they were nice comments. I put happy bday mom #1. During that night we went midnight bowling. When we was their i was wining the game. People said that i was cheating and that my bowling ball was magical. My bowling ball was a glowable bowl and the colors was blue,white,and purple. I won two games in the row and i was rubbing it in everybody's faces hahahaahahaha i am good at bowling and they know it. SOme people think that i got lucky because they think that my ball was gliding on the alley but it wasn't. // // After that day the next day i went gokart riding. It took about a hour for us to get where we're going. The place that we went it was really hot outside. The place had a arcade and that and a mini golf place. It looked so kool and it was fun. It had been a while sence i went gokart riding. When i was about to get on my heart was pounding and i was hoping that i wouldn't crash or nothing dangerous would happen to me on the kart. When i got on the gokart i felt like i waas going to cry but i didnt't because i was strong like that. So i was riding the gokart and i was acting like i was in a real car and it was fun. Everybody was going past me and i was mad because i was in third to last place. My cousin name paris bumb my car so hard i was going to punch her in the face. You have no idea how bad it hurted i started to have a headake like a garilla. But after that it was fun and awesome. When we was leaving we had mcdonalds and it was really good. Well my moms birthday was finished for the year it was really fun though i can't wait for my birthday to come up because i get good stuff like money yay. // // Well my summer was good until my end of the summer. My mom,brother,grandpa,and aunt was going to see my grandma to see how she's doing while i stayed at othello's house and something really sad happen and that i wouldn't forget this moment in my life. My grandmother past away while my mom and others was at the hospital. When i heard the new my heart drop like i went to hell( excuse my language mr boll). I cryed and yelled grandma ouside of othello's house i was crying fo like forever until i couldn't cry nomore. my mom was so sad i wanted to give her the biggest hug that i can give her but tha wouldn't do any good. I just couldn't believe it she was gone.That day was the darkest day of my summer. MY brother was heart broken mostly everybody's heart was broken. My grandmother and my brother was so close to each other it was to sad for me and everyone else. My grand mother was only 70 years old when she died. In was in August when she died. She was a strong woman and i really miss her than everthing. I was crying a couple of days after her death. A week later after her death their was the funeral everybody was in tears and and i was too crying my eyes out when i looked at her. It was horrible for me to see this happen. When the funneral was over everybody went to the apartment where my grandmother lived at. The landlord offered us to celerbrate my grandma's living and death at the aprartment. Everybody was their and having a good time and talking. Their was good food at the place. I really liked the mac and cheese that my aunt made. She makes the best mac and cheese. Even though my grandma is gone she is always with us forever. She was the one who brought the family back together and making us have a good time. My summer had a happy and sad ending. the sad part is when my grandmother past and the happy part is when the whole family was back together because of my grandma. Even though me and my grandma didn't get along in some part of life we still loved each other. I just wished i could of get to know her more like i know my grandpa but at least i had a grandma that cares and love and was fun. I love you grandma R.I.P love you forever :) // // Well you guys this is the ending of my story if you hate it their is something wrong with you and you have to go for help. If you like it thank you and you are a cool person. This summer taught me a lesson about family and spending time with family. I aslo realized that if you don't have family you have nothing. I also realized that thiswas the best summer that i had so far in my life. Thank you for reading my summer story :) //

// Jada- I love it. You are doing a great job with this. It is kind of narrative journey from graduation of 6th grade to the beginning of 7th grade. I'll let you off the hook for swearing :) because it was a good simile. Your description is strong and you are demonstrating a good understanding of organization in writing. Basically, i think you should just keep doing as much writing and reading as you can. I think you can still finish this narrative, because you there is still a little more to say. Your appreciation of family really comes through well in your writing. I think you could include this in the lesson you share in the end. Anyway, you are doing a good job. Keep it up in class. //

Writing about graduation is a good time to talk about your goals in education. You made the first step by completing elementery, but there is certainly a lot more that you can accomplish. Good writing. It may help to look back over it for any misspellings or sentence issues that you can catch. That will be the first step in editing. Good work Jada. Excellent Jada. I like your introduction and your description of the day. I think you have a great start here. Keep going. Remember to take time to describe things: the cloths other students were wearing, your thoughts, were you nervous. It is a great start. Keep going.

// ) Have you ever surfed the biggest wave in your life that make you have a stroke then here is the story hi my name is Jane and I surfed the biggest wave in my entire life. Surfi // // my dream, i wanted to be a surfer when i was like 15 years old. My mom didnt like surfing and that she didin't want me to surf but, she said "if that is what I want ot do go live it up and I will always be their to cheer you on". // // When i was about 17 or 18 i gpt myself a surging teacher and that I was trained well. It was really hard but I know how to surf. When i was 20 I became a surfer and I faced challenges. I faced the biggest waves of my life and it was a dangerous thing that I had ever did sence i was a surfer. //// When this happen it was a compitition to see if you can survive the biggest wave. So i joined it, and when i saw that wave to be honest i was afraid and that i thought i coulnd't do it but i did it was the scariest the most biggest wave i did in my entire life. It was so insane when i was down I past out and 1 or 2 hours later i woke p and I won the trophy of the survival of the biggest wave. That wave changed my life whe i first saw that wave i thought that it might be a tsuami coming and that i prabaly not be able to surf again. That wave looked like a wave but with alittle light i the wave it felt like i was in heaven because i thought that i wasn't gonna make it. I also thought that I was about to taste nasty salt water. I felt like i was dieing and i was going to drown all the way to the ground. // // The thing that I've learned is that you have the chance to do what ever you want and that you have to always believe in youself.Also that everything is possible if you just have god to make sure that you are safe. If you think that you can surf like me try the biggest wave and that you see and try to feel the same way as i felt whwen i went on to the wave // // The passage that im readin about is that their is a new batman movie coming out this summer and it as filmed in pittburgh. I like this passage because that it is telling us that their is // // a movie taking in pittsburgh and that i like batman well not like i love it but batman begins and the dark night is a good movie and i bet that this batman movie called The Dark King Rises is going to be a good movie sence it was filmed in pittsburgh. People from pittsburgh is going to watch it because it was filmed in pittsburgh and that they like batman. The dark night movie was longand it was realesed in july around 2008. I'm hoping that this movies isn;t goin to be long and that if it's long i hope it better be a good long movie. Iv'e realized that movies is for entertaining and for money. // // Great work here Jada. Your paper looks really good and really well organized. Keep working hard and listening in class. It is paying off for you. You are, as I have told you before, a // // talented writer. // //4) The principal is considering to make this school to wear uniforms. They are considering us to wear uniforms because some students in the school might wear something inapropreate for school. To my opinion is that we us students should wear uniforms. The thing that I'm writing about is something that the principals should read because this is something that is serious and that they need to hear it from somebody. The reasons why im writing about this is because so that we can express ourselves and for the parents that dont have time to spend money on buying uniforms. Another reason why is that we us students don't want to wear the same thing everyday. If you read this passage you would want to agree with me and don't let the children wear unforms.// //The reason why we shouldn't wear uniforms because we are students that want to wear anything that we want to wear. Some students well all students want to wear anything we want and some students was to wear something nice and creative to wear. For example we need to wear anyhing that we want to wear because so it could be creative for the school and themselves. Students wants to express themselves and show the teachers and people who they are and what they can do. But they shouldn't matter what students wear because if the person is smart enough they wouldn't wear anything that is inapropreate, but if someone that is wearing something is inapropreate they should go home and change their outfit or whatever they need to change. That is one of the reasons why we shouldn't wear uniforms.// //Anothe reason why is that if wehoave to wear a uniform we have to wash our uniform everyday. Like if some people live in an apartment like me and you have to wash clothes and you have to pay a dollar in quarters to wash and dry your cothes your mother is going to use all of their money to just wash a uniform. Also because like if we have to buy uniforms to go to school every five days thats going to be our parents budgets and they are gonna have no money well not enough money to buy anything if parents having money problems like my mom just my mom. They shouldn't just care about the students wearing uniforms they should also care about the parents paying money for these ugly looking uniforms. They should aslo care about the studnets expression. That is another reason why we shouldn't wear uniforms.// //The final reason why we shouldn't wear uniforms because if you wear the some thing eveyday the school and the children will look boring and that some parents think that the school isn't good enough for their children and that they won't go to the school. Some parents want their children to go to a school that is creative and not boring. Also because that you want a school that looks all creative and nice and childrens that has expression that the children want to be in the school. You want students to come to your school right, then stop letting students wear uniforms and not be boring with it and let them wear something that is creative and it looks like a good place so that students to come hear and learn somethng by being creative. That is my final reason why students shouldn't wear uniforms.// //If you are reading this principals i really hope that this passage will teach you a lesson that students should wear what they want to wear and not wear uniforms. If you don't like it you are going to maybe loose students and your school will fall maybe to my opinion. These are the reason why students shouldn't wear uniforms becaue of our expression, our creativty and our for our parents that pay money for some ugly corny boring uniforms. I really hope you listen to this and to the other students that might read this i really hope you like it Thank you " smily face lolz".//

//Jada, Good start and you are doing a good job with this "writing lab" or whatever we call it. All the hard work is paying off in your writing. This is an interesting assignment because it is unlike most of the writing we have done so far this year. Organization is important.// //Intro- Try to think of an introduction that could get the attention of the reader. This could be a question or an explanation of the debate about school uniforms.//

//Three body paragraphs: clothes is one way that students express themselves, uniforms can cause a problem for students who need to wash them every day or pay for uniforms, and arguments for school uniforms and why they could be avoided (wearing inappropriate things). Each of those could be expanded to a paragraph.//

//Conclusion- We can talk about this//

//3) The thing that u can improve your spelling is to practice. Practicing make things better. If you practice u can get better and better if you train yourself to spell more nd practice more. If you have a test every friday about spelling you practice before you start the test so that the words can get in your head.When you get done with the test you should look at the words that you just took a test on and see if you got them right or wrong. It is okay if you get a word wrong at least you've tried. If you practice everyday you can get better enough to compete in a spelling be,but spelling bees are much resposible thing that you have to do to win. That means study really hard and do a type of an activity with friends so that tey can help you win the spelling bee. Maybe if you do something that is very catchy that you can remember the words and it can get easier to remember. Or maybe you can make up a song with the words so that you can remember the words. Use a dictonary to see what the definision is and how to spell the word. You can get on a computer and find words you want to spell and definision to the word. I would use a computer than a dictonary because if you get on the computer you can find the word easier tha a dictionary. The point is that if you practice and practice you can get better in spelling than you think. If you want to be a great speller you can't be lazy and not feeling like doing any thing because thatis how i am. That's how you can improve your spelling.// //2) The neighborhood looks scary. I see people that are homeless and alone at night.I watch the news and i see black people going to jail and see black people gettin killed for no simple reasons. It's really bad to see this happen in this neighborhod but I'm not suprised at this. I see schools that looks like that it was built in the 1800s. This neighborhood looks all nasty to me . I see trash all over the place black and white people looking at me thinking that i look good and this is so distrurbing even if the person is ugly that's not cool for me. I think that this neighborhood is dangerous to me and other people. I see white and black people smokig and ghettos gettting locked up in jail. But their are some good things about this neighborhood. I see childrens and friends having fun on some streets and it's really no trouble until night time,but at least that we have kids having a good time. I also see abandon houses that need sto be fix so that this neighborhood look less empy. I see murals that makes a point to this neighborhood and it looks nice the pictures are really creative like the one at the bus stop and at mcdonalds. This makes this neighborhood look colorful alittle bit not alot though. Right now ouside i see a gray sky that looks like it's going to rain today. Also it's really wet outside because of yestrday and i don't like a wet neighborhood.// //Jada- You did a really nice job with this. As I was reading, I was hoping that you would focus on the good things about the neighborhood as well. Then you did! I like that you are willing to see the good and the bad. I think the description is strong here as well. I can picture the kids playing in the street and having fun, the depressing news stories, and and the murals that brighten the bus stop. Good job. There are some sentence things that could be fixed here. I also think that when you say how you feel, your best writing comes out. Good job.//

1) the speaker to motivate WMH students and persuade the reader why that's the best choice is Obama the President of the United States. I would like Obama to be the speaker because he is the President and also because we need to have somebody to tell us the education is important and we need to be a better school for this district . He can make a good speach as good as hw was elected for President. We also need a speacker because we need to bring our pssa scores up so we can do better and better. We can learn that education and pssa is really important to us and this district and so this could be a better school. Also becaus he is one of the first Black American to be a speaker for our school so that he can make a point about our education. That's why I would pick Barak Obama to be a speaker. Also because he made alot of acoplishments in his life.